tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2184562380062162084.post4557867632572514477..comments2023-10-20T12:15:19.486+01:00Comments on LIVE WRITE DREAM: A novel taster...Louhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04152803362923785129noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2184562380062162084.post-47926937854671714932010-02-03T23:40:25.273+00:002010-02-03T23:40:25.273+00:00Petty Witter and Kate: Thanks for the great commen...Petty Witter and Kate: Thanks for the great comments! :)Louhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04152803362923785129noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2184562380062162084.post-47717959964830811602010-02-02T21:34:04.679+00:002010-02-02T21:34:04.679+00:00I really like it - very atmospheric and I want to ...I really like it - very atmospheric and I want to know what happens next!<br /><br />Kate xKatehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05940810066436848209noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2184562380062162084.post-29891257597119204382010-02-02T19:21:41.189+00:002010-02-02T19:21:41.189+00:00Beautifullly written, I can picture it all in my h...Beautifullly written, I can picture it all in my head.Felicity Grace Terryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17852843882007267665noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2184562380062162084.post-71572394848500492172010-02-01T19:22:57.954+00:002010-02-01T19:22:57.954+00:00Yep, I'd be intrigued to know the context but ...Yep, I'd be intrigued to know the context but it definitely left me wanting more. The first 21 words had me hooked. Great imagery - very evocative. Beautifully written - though I'd expect nothing less from you Lou.<br /><a href="http://plentymorefishoutofwater.blogspot.com/" rel="nofollow">plentymorefishoutofwater.blogspot.com</a>Plentymorefishoutofwaterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13082519518524749450noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2184562380062162084.post-42640952236546986702010-02-01T18:46:52.098+00:002010-02-01T18:46:52.098+00:00Lou! This little excerpt has me wanting more. And ...Lou! This little excerpt has me wanting more. And more. Such great writing. Do we need to know hom much time has passed at all? <br /><br />I really love when the two burly men show up. Fantastic Lou! I knew you should write a novel I just knew it. I wonder where she is at. A prison? Some sort of hospital. Not a nut house. Hmmmm,it doesn't matter where she is to me though. And what should have you excited is that the readers are wondering. That's a great sign for you. Super job. I can't wait to read more. (^_^)Robyn Campbellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17356555082768185840noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2184562380062162084.post-4394114123618187992010-02-01T18:23:29.033+00:002010-02-01T18:23:29.033+00:00That's a very good point Sarah- thank you! Thi...That's a very good point Sarah- thank you! This is what happens when you stare at something so much- you don't see the little tweaks you can make. Cheers for that.<br /><br />As for the passage- well it's not the opening- it's intended to be a flashback. And she isn't necessarily in a nut house. It's complicated. Part of the evolving story. I may cut things from this. It may not end up in the final draft at all. I'm just playing around with style and such.<br /><br />Nowhere near finished at the moment. Probably won't post any more. Don't want people to get bored! haha :)Louhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04152803362923785129noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2184562380062162084.post-14945751431495880522010-02-01T16:54:14.679+00:002010-02-01T16:54:14.679+00:00it's a good opening. she's in a nut house ...it's a good opening. she's in a nut house and doesn't know why she's there. makes me want to know more. one question: since she's in a groggy state of mind, do you think "some time passed" is better than a precise "ten minutes later"? <br /><br />are you almost finished? are you going to post more of the novel? i want to read more.Sarahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05246393318938411419noreply@blogger.com